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Nowadays artificial intelligence is being used to drive cars. what is the reason? is it positive or negative development ?

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It has been noticed recently that everything around us has now a 'robotic' version.
Although
such
 advanced technology has proved to have a plethora of merits.
However
, it still has
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demerits
also
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examine
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 machines. The
first
 positive aspect of the artificial intelligence used in
cars
 is the
auto
 driver feature, which
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handicapped people
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especially
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. In the sense that, these
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 individuals were in the past unable to leave their homes to commute to work, universities, or any other place without being
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 another person.
Such
 technology offered them the ability to have full or partial
auto
 drive
in addition
 to other options
such
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 chair in the baggage of the
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 automatically.
In other words
, it is an ideal solution for
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their
 handicap. Another important positive side to highlight is the safety side. It is well known that
such
cars
 are supplied with advanced technical sensors to provide the
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 level of safety for both passengers and pedestrians as well. a good example to illustrate
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 is the BMW
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, which set the car on parking mode if the
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 door was open or if the back camera noticed any living thing behind the car if it was on
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reverse mode. The negative side of providing
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vehicles
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 intelligence system is the possibility of
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 to occur, which would certainly expose
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people to dangerous accidents. A clear and
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recent example to illustrate
this
 pressing point is the news about the
Tessla
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Tesla
cars
, which
faild
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field
 many times to avoid little children as the computer failed to recognise the little kids and did not stop the car without hitting them. To conclude, the aforementioned points clearly clarified the positive and the negative points of
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auto
cars
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However
, it is undeniable that it has improved
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human life
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hugely
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 it has proved that human presence is essential and cannot be fully
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 by robots. Humans should be alert for any systematic error in
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 machines to maintain their safety.
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