Some people think that the government is wasting money on the arts and that this money could be better spent elsewhere. To what extent do you agree with this view.
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Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).
Stick to this essay structure:
- Paragraph 1 - Introduction
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