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Some people believe that educational success depends on good teacher; others think that it depends on the attitude of the students. Discuss both the views and give your opinion.

#people #success #teacher #attitude #students
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It is undeniable that the
teacher
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 plays a significant role in the
life
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 of every
student
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 for ages. Some people think that because of a good
teacher
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students
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 get success in their
education
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, while some people think that educational success depends on
student
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 attitude. I agree with the statement that educational success depends on a good
teacher
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 and I think
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 way for two reasons, which I will discuss in
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 essay.
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,
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students
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, I feel that, nowadays
students
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 are surrounded by
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 of extra activities, which
keeps
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 them busy,
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 as playing video games, games on smartphones, use of social sites for chatting with friends, movies, amusement parks and many more. If there is no guidance in their
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,
students
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 easily get distracted and use their precious time more in these activities rather than in studies. Here, a good professor can guide their
students
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, to focus more on their studies and can motivate them to become diligent
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 their
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 and utilise their time in a pragmatic way.
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, a good educator can easily grab the
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's problem and aid in solving the issue. My own personal experience is a compelling example of
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. When I was in
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high school, I was not good
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 math subjects and I
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 don't like to study math.
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, I used to get passing marks
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 my monthly class test. My educator recognizes the issue and
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 me know that because of my poor understanding of the subject, I am doing below average in it.
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, she give me daily practice tests to learn the concept in a better way and
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 helped me to clear my basics in the subject. Just after a month, I get a distinction on my math test. In conclusion, I believe that a good
teacher
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 can make a strong base of
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life
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, both in
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 and
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 in career,
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 aiding
students
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 to be more successful in
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 and in every aspect of
life
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.
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