Schools have a limited amount of money to spend. Some people suggest that it should be spend on good teachers, while others say it should be spent for buying equipment like computers. Discuss both the views and give your opinion.

In Perú, there are many schools which are quite different. Between them, a few educative places have
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to an awesome learning level, but countless others have not
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close to it even a little bit.
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immense difference could have been happening because of either a lack of good teachers or an absence of equipment. In the following text, we are going to assess whether the schools should use their budget
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acceptable equipment or
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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