Influence of human being on the world ecosystem is leading to the extinction of species and loss of biodiversity. what are the causes and solutions?

In today's
world
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the nature of human
being
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beings
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has changed to become more focused on consumption. Due to
this
ever increasing
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demand
of
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things we are knowingly or unknowingly causing harm to mother nature. The two main causes for
this
are Increasing
population
and
exponential
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rise
in mobile
usage
. I will elaborate
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causes and their solutions below. Due to the
rise
in
population
, people need houses to live in. To meet
this
increasing
demand
many builders are cutting down forests to build homes. Due to
this
rising
population
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the
demand
for goods is increasing and
government
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the government
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is meeting
this
demand
by modernising
transportation
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the transportation
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system by building new roads, many of which are built by
destroting
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destroying
the mountains. The
second
cause is
rise
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a rise
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in
usage
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the usage
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of mobile phones.
This
increases the
demand
for connectivity which leads to
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the building
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large
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connectivity towers. The frequency of these towers is intercepted by birds
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sparrows and it causes them various diseases which
then
leads
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lead
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to their death. In the
past
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we were able to see sparrows
in
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our balcony, but nowadays we can hardly notice one sparrow. The solution
for
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the
population
rise
can be to control the
population
rise
.
This
poppulation
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population
control will benefit us in the coming years. Regarding the current explosion of
population
, we can certainly increase the height of towers to meet the
demand
and we can carefully select a location to build
new
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building
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where there is minimal harm to nature. For
the
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mobile
usage
, we can decrease our
usage
wherever possible. In
conclusion
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I would like to say that we as humans should keep a check
of
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our demands so that we
dont
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don't
burden
the
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natural resources.
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