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Influence of human being on the world ecosystem is leading to the extinction of species and loss of biodiversity. what are the causes and solutions?

#influence #world #ecosystem #extinction #species #loss #biodiversity
In today's
world
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 the nature of human
being
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beings
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 has changed to become more focused on consumption. Due to
this
ever increasing
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demand
of
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for
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 things we are knowingly or unknowingly causing harm to mother nature. The two main causes for
this
 are Increasing
population
 and
exponential
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an exponential
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rise
 in mobile
usage
. I will elaborate
the
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 causes and their solutions below. Due to the
rise
 in
population
, people need houses to live in. To meet
this
 increasing
demand
 many builders are cutting down forests to build homes. Due to
this
 rising
population
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,population
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 the
demand
 for goods is increasing and
government
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the government
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 is meeting
this
demand
 by modernising
transportation
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the transportation
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 system by building new roads, many of which are built by
destroting
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destroying
 the mountains. The
second
 cause is
rise
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a rise
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 in
usage
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the usage
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 of mobile phones.
This
 increases the
demand
 for connectivity which leads to
building
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the building
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large
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of large
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 connectivity towers. The frequency of these towers is intercepted by birds
especially
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 sparrows and it causes them various diseases which
then
leads
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lead
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 to their death. In the
past
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 we were able to see sparrows
in
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 our balcony, but nowadays we can hardly notice one sparrow. The solution
for
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 the
population
rise
 can be to control the
population
rise
.
This
poppulation
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population
 control will benefit us in the coming years. Regarding the current explosion of
population
, we can certainly increase the height of towers to meet the
demand
 and we can carefully select a location to build
new
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building
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buildings
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 where there is minimal harm to nature. For
the
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apply
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mobile
usage
, we can decrease our
usage
 wherever possible. In
conclusion
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 I would like to say that we as humans should keep a check
of
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 our demands so that we
dont
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don't
 burden
the
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apply
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natural resources.
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