In many parts of the world, children and teenagers are committing more crimes, what are the causes? How should these young criminals to be punished?

Despite the fact that social advances have brought about many benefits to people’s daily lives, the rate of crime has not efficiently been curbed
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but rather been aggravated.
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analyze all the possible causes of the problem and
then
come up with several feasible solutions that could be adopted in order to avoid the aggravation of the situation. The main causes that may lead to
this
problem can be listed as follows. The
first
cause of
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increasing number of juvenile delinquency might be the
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wrong values of
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generation. Compared with the past, the gap between the rich and the poor has
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widened to a big difference. According to
this
phenomenon, more inequities will
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.
Therefore
, youngsters who are immature, are partial to
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a crime to fight injustice.
This
is the inevitable result of social development.
Besides
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of companionship of
parents
might be a
second
culprit for the growing number of juvenile delinquency. It is very common that in some rural regions of China, due to lack
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opportunities,
parents
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to get out
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under-developed
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rural region and migrate to big cities for the purpose of finding
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excellent job,
which
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their children alone or living with the elderly.
However
, children who lack
of
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parenting and companionship of
parents
will be easier to go astray and
that is
why nowadays teenagers are committing more crimes. Several methods can be adopted in order to solve the aggravating problem.
First
of all, for the light circumstances, there is no doubt that their
parents
should
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the penalty so as to warn children
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not
commit
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crimes.
Second
, under any circumstances, criminals should
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.
Moreover
, If
the
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juvenile offenders between sixteen and eighteen years old and had
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,
such
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someone, would go to the correctional institution. In conclusion,
parents
and the public should pay more attention to
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children’s mental health, and in order to avoid the growth of
juvenile
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delinquency rate, paying
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,
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and going to
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institution
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for offenders are the three solutions that I came up with.
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