Many animal species in the world are becoming extinct nowadays. Some people say that countries and individuals should protect these animals from dying out, while others say we should concentrate more on problems of human beings. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Many people argue that countries and the public should preserve the nearly

extincted

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extinct

animals

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, while opponents consider social problems related to

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mankind are more significant. From my perspective, I believe that the protection of some animal species and solving social problems are equally important. On one hand, it is

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crucial

critical

cruical

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crucial

to protect

animals

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which are essential to our

eco-system

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ecosystem

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, some species are irreplaceable in the food chains. If they were extinct, it would cause

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in the natural system and might be detrimental to the survival of human beings.

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, some

animals

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have

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cultural

cultral

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cultural

values and serve as national identity. Pandas are

extincting

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extinct

animals

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and are symbols of Chinese culture,

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, local government fund in

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and set up national parks for pandas.

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, there are

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various social issues like education, health

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and poverty, which requires national funding and support.

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, children from economically backward areas might have no access to schooling and have to become underaged workers to support their families. The government should increase educational investments and make sure every child can receive compulsory education.

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, many people cannot afford medical

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and they have to give up treatment or choose to take less effective but cheaper medicines. Both central and local governments should subsidise the needy on health

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and none should refuse treatments because of economic reasons. In conclusion, the government and individuals should take the responsibility to protect

extincting

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extinction

extinct

animals

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which are important to

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society.

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Similarily

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, other social issues including education and health

care

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should be tackled

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as well.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

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Topic Vocabulary:

biodiversity
cascading effects
economic impacts
ecosystem
endangered species
environmental conservation
human welfare
moral duty
preserve
sustainable practices
habitats
interconnected
extinction
advocates
opponents
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