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Small businesses are disappearing and being replaced by large multinational companies. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages

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In recent times, small trade
companies
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 have become
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 compared to large industries, it is a devastating issue to self business owners, large multinational
companies
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 play a crucial part
of
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 its society, it has advantages and disadvantages, in
this
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 essay, I will discuss both sides. On the one hand, the main benefit of a large-scale business is that it would positively aid
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economical
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 growth because multinational
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 can make innovations and produce
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large number of products compared to small
companies
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 and
companies
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 can exports their products
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worldwide,
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, it would generate to good income and support to the nation's
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 growth
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, in Sri Lanka GDP's, that 70% of
incomes
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 come from large multinational
companies
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, another benefit is that large multinational
companies
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 that stimulate more job opportunities than small trades to the community, it would aid to certainly enhance
people
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's
incomes
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.
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, the main disadvantage of
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 phenomenon is that, if not
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 small
businesses
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 it would affect self-employers
incomes
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 as a consequence,
people
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 would definitely face
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 crisis and
people
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 will become
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poverty
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, in India,
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50%
people
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 have small
businesses
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 and
people
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 live from small
businesses
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incomes
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, if every small product imports that the government have to face a huge sum of expenditure because encourage to small
businesses
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 products manufacture, if not encourage, it would a huge sum of expenditure to the economy and experience financial crisis. In conclusion, after a thorough analysis of the topic,
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of
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businesses
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 generate a huge income, it has advantages and disadvantages, self-employer
businesses
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also
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 play a vital part
of
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 its society, it can enforce the right method before implementing it

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Displacement
  • Economies of scale
  • Local economies
  • Standardization
  • Cultural homogenization
  • Personalized service
  • Innovation
  • Community investments
  • Environmental impact
  • Competitive prices
  • Tax contributions
  • Job losses
  • Cultural diversity
  • Local employment opportunities
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