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Mobile phones have brought both benefits and drawbacks to phone users. Discuss both sides and state your opinion.

#phones #phone #users
With the development of technology and now we have more types of phones and
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incurs
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people
 who
use
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 phones because the life is
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development
 ,but with
this
 improve we have some benefits and drawback and we will draw your attention about some
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citizens
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did
decide
 the reason is
mobile
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phone
.
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first
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advantages the
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mobile
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a lot
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lot
 of
people
 have a
phone
 and account in any abs and we
use
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phone
 in all walks of life whereas we do our work with him and steady by
phone
 and like when
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we
 have heard mood in life or in the government you
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and
can
 study or work in the home
also
 more easy and very fast ,so we have a good thing we should to preserved it
furthermore
,
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 if you ask yourself what the
phone
 do for us think about
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phone
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 is very hard
say
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 in your mind how is important for you.
Next
, the
drawbacks
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in
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 the
phone
is
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 our
use
 of it some
people
 have different goals
such
 as
the
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sabotage by
use
 in a bad thing and
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 some
people
 hurtful things to make money ,but we should fight them ,
in
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 there are some bad things like the
people
 don't have a social together like when the family meet each other and don't say
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anything
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 just hold the
phone
 and brose , so we should
to
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take care when we
use
 the
phone
. In conclusion, in my opinion, there are many things positives and negatives thing, but the problem
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 we are using the mobile
phone
 when we
use
 it in bad ways will be
a bad results
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a bad result
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 and when we
use
 it in a good way will find
a great results
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great results
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 and will
be have
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 many benefits.
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