With the widespread use of interent , more and more peolpe choose to work from home. Do the advantage of this trend outwight the disadvantage?

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To begin
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with, everybody knows and is aware that technology
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as the
internet
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poses many benefits. Its widespread of it leads to various angles of change,
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as working from home. Time-saving and employee safety is a crucial in productivity
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, these two factors are definitely the main pulling points for the public to opt for
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trend. The result from many surveys had proven that time-saving was indeed the most top and popular reason.
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more productivity could be generated.
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option nowadays gained much more preference after the COVID-19 pandemic. Through
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method, a lot of companies manage to remain and sustain, rather than fall bankrupt, especially during disasters
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as COVID-19.
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, we
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seen so many companies and factories shut down just because the nature of their work could not be replaced by performing from far. An example is car component production. Numbers of cars back locked. Apart from that, the travelling activity to job place
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will be minimised
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,
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the motor
vehicles
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accident rate in Malaysia. As known, the percentage of traffic collisions in Malaysia is rather high.
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is a great thing. The majority of employers agree with
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point. It benefited both parties. During the COVID-19 pandemic, motor vehicle accident occurrences declined tremendously.
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is because almost all the civilians stay at home. Schooling, working and business activities were carried out virtually. In a nutshell, performing job activities from home
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many pros not only to the worker but
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to the company or organisation. It is a time and
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, plus
risk reduction
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risk-reduction
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way.
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Ensure that the introduction clearly outlines the discussion points and presents a clear thesis statement. Additionally, the conclusion should summarize the main points and restate the thesis.
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The response should fully address the prompt, discussing both advantages and disadvantages of working from home. Make sure to support each point with relevant examples and provide a balanced view.

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.

Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

Linking words for giving examples:

  • for example
  • for instance
  • to illustrate this
  • to give a clear example
  • such as
  • namely
  • to illustrate
  • take, for example

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