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Title: More and more students are choosing to study at colleges and universities in a foreign country. Do the benefits of studying abroad outweigh the drawbacks

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There has been a phenomenon that more and more
students
 choose to study abroad. I think the advantages of studying in a foreign country outweigh its disadvantages, and my reasons will be explained in the following paragraphs.
First
, learning advanced knowledge and experience. Take China as an example.
Although
 our scientific technology has improved a lot;
however
, there is still a huge gap between China and the developed countries in terms of technological level. At
this
 point, studying abroad gives
students
 an opportunity to continue their studies and learn new knowledge.
As a result
,
students
 can use the knowledge that they learned from other countries to improve their own countries.
Second
, practising
students
' independent skills. It's expected that there will be a huge difference between
students
' home country and the country where they study.
Besides
, it's
also
 challenging to be used to the new environment, and make new friends.
Hence
, it's a great chance to practice your independent abilities. Take me as an example. I'm from China, and I'm studying in the Neverlands now. Everything here is new for me;
nevertheless
, I still consider studying here alone
is
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 a good chance to learn how to be independent.
On the other hand
, studying abroad has some disadvantages.
For instance
, it's extremely pricy. According to some statistical figures, the average cost of an international student in the US is around 20,000 dollars, which is even higher than a normal family's annual income.
Besides
, it's not guaranteed whether
students
 can earn
this
 amount of money back from their future jobs. In conclusion, I believe the merits of studying abroad outstrip its demerits.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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