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Some say that music,art and drama are as impy as other school subjects, especially at the primary level. Do you agree or disagree?

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The given bar graph compares the average house
price
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 of five different metropolises in two periods 1990 to 1995 and 1996 to 2002 with the
price
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 of each area in 1989. Overall, it is noticeable that the average house
price
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 in London had the most significant change from 1990 to 2002, whereas that of Frankfurt was relatively stable. Looking
first
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 at the
period
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 from 1990 to 1995, compared to 1989, the average
price
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 of New work fell by 5%, and that of Tokyo and London had an identical degree of decrease at around 7.5 per
cent
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. As for Madrid and Frankfurt, both witnessed a rise, the former increased by 2 per
cent
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 and the latter had an approximately 2.5
growth
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. Moving onto the
second
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period
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, a 5 per
cent
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 increase in average house
price
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 can be seen in New York and Madrid had about 3.5
growth
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 in the same
period
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. London experienced the highest
growth
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, increasing by over 10 per
cent
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, whereas that of Frankfurt rose merely 2 per
cent
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. Tokyo, the only city that witnessed negative
growth
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, a five per
cent
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 fall can be seen in the
period
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.
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