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Small businesses are disappearing and being replaced by large multinational companies. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages

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In recent times, small trade
companies
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 have become
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 compared to large industries. It is a devastating issue
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 self-business owners, large multinational
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 play a crucial part in its society. It has advantages and disadvantages. In
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 essay. I will discuss both sides. On the one hand, trade is a crucial role in national economic growth. Big-scale
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 generate large-scale products in a day. It helps to provide all over the country and exports their goods to different countries because stimulates their income and supports the national economy.
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, in Sri Lanka's GDP, 60% of incomes come from big industrial
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, another benefit is that huge multinational
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 are stimulating job opportunities because it will help people enhance their quality of life and enhance incomes
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, the main disadvantage of
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 phenomenon is that governments encourage big multinational
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 which leads to small
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demotivated
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 small business owners' incomes degenerate as a consequence, self employers would face a financial crisis and people will become
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poverty. In my opinion, especially it is good to balance both business types for economic growth.
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, India has big self- employers and small
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 but encouraged only large-scale
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.
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 proper long-term strategies can decline these issues. In conclusion, after a thorough analysis of the topic, large-scale
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 generate a huge income. It has advantages and disadvantages. Self-employer
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also
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 play a vital part in its society. It can enforce the right method before implementing it

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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

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I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Displacement
  • Economies of scale
  • Local economies
  • Standardization
  • Cultural homogenization
  • Personalized service
  • Innovation
  • Community investments
  • Environmental impact
  • Competitive prices
  • Tax contributions
  • Job losses
  • Cultural diversity
  • Local employment opportunities
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