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5.A. More people are traveling today than ever before. Why do you think this is? What are the benefits of traveling for traveler

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As part of a refreshment public nowadays travel a lot just to get a break from their hectic or busy soul schedule. In today's life,
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 are well aware that going for a break will get them back more energetic and refresh their mood.I will be discussing the benefits of travelling.
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 talking about, today's life is all about pollution, traffic signals, eight hours of work growth, and so on. just to enjoy life nowadays crowd started roaming here and there, because
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 the best distraction for them. It is very difficult to sit for hours in front of a laptop or computer. In ,
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 I have been looking toward the public working so hard, that it is not possible to sit for many time to sit in front of a laptop. ,
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 benefit to travellers is that they get a short or long break from their routine. some of them
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 travel for the money, they do it as a profession like blogging and making information videos for their channels on youtube or Instagram. by showing their content they get paid if their content is good or different from others.
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, if we are planning to go for a trip but, the location is new for us
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 we can see their videos and get information about that place or location,
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 there are many advantages of having a short break from a workaholic activity like we get familiar with many new technologies like a camera for shooting photos
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 we get to know new social activity.
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