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Emigration from developing country is seen as a plus. Does the advantage outweigh the disadvantage

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Citizens of a country are free to migrate. Relocating from a less developed nation is perceived as beneficial.
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 give a pragmatic viewpoint; the positive
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 does not outweigh the negatives
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 with, there are innumerable gains of exiting a
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low-income
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income
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 country. In developed countries, students have
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better learning exposure as seen in students with abroad degrees with better job performance.
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, the professionals that leave for high -
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income
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a income
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environment
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environments
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 become more skilful
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 their jobs because of the better infrastructure at their disposal.
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, people that migrate from
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not-so-developed
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setting
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 enjoy
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 standard of living
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 of
better
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income
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.
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, the adverse
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 of relocation cannot be undermined. The continuous loss of
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 to other nations is a big challenge. Brain drain can affect the educational sector of any country leaving her devoid of expert trainers.
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, the transition of professional workers
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 as medical practitioners has a grievous
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 on the health sector of
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 nations which can lead to
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 mortality
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. The government will
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 be at a colossal economic loss when a larger percentage of her active working class are not residents. To sum it up,
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 leaving a
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income
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 nation for a high one is good, its
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 on
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society at large is gruesome. In my view, the government's priority should be on developing
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 nation to retain
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 citizens.
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