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In some cultures, children are often told that they can achieve anything if they try hard enough. What are the advantages and disadvantages of giving children this message

#cultures #children #message
Some nations often teach their
children
 a belief, which is
children
 made a lot of effort on something they want to achieve and their dreams would come true.
However
, there are some pros and cons
of
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this
 information. On the one hand, I believe the meaning of
message
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the message
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 is beneficial to
improve
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children
‘s confidence, encouraging them to pursue their dream as possible as they can.
This
 means that
children
 have more motivation to achieve what they truly want in their life.
For example
, parents usually provide some incentives,
such
 as toys or
new
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 mobile
phone
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, to
motivated
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 their
children
 to study hard for gaining
the
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rewards.
In addition
, the advantages of giving
this
 information would build trust and bravery in their childhood, making them believe everything would pay back if they work hard enough. On the
ot her
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 hand, there are some drawbacks
of
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 informing
this
 concept to kids. When
children
 totally trust
this
message
, they may feel more frustrated if
children
 failed to finish something they had tried hard enough. It probably broke their trust and belief
on
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 the earth, losing their motivation for improving themselves. In fact,
this
 piece of
message
 is not absolutely correct, we all realized that we can’t complete anything in our life, neither nor naive
children
. In conclusion, there are different opinions on
this
 concept, which have many advantages and disadvantages in
this
 issue. In my opinion, I don’t think it’s proper to teach
children
this
 information. There will be a better solution or method for boosting their motivation,
instead
 of providing them
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a
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 impossible dream. It may eventually lead to
miserable
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a miserable
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 mood if they are told
this
message
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • achieve
  • try hard
  • positive mindset
  • self-belief
  • motivates
  • ambitious goals
  • resilience
  • determination
  • confidence
  • self-esteem
  • growth mindset
  • unrealistic expectations
  • disappointment
  • failure
  • effort
  • hard work
  • seek support
  • individual differences
  • abilities
  • capabilities
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