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Some people think that using animals for experimentation purpose is cruel but other people that it is necessary for the development of science. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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 experiment has been a topic of debate for the past decades. Some scientists consider that it is beneficial to use
animals
 for testing.
On the contrary
, others reckon that these
experiments
 are brutal and unreasonable to innocent
animals
. In
this
 essay, I am going to elaborate on the discussion of
this
 issue.
First
 and foremost, one of the main merits of undergoing animal
experiments
 is that people can benefit from the results of these investigations.
For example
, due to
the
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COVID-19, the demand for
vaccine
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 increased dramatically.
Therefore
, lots of pharmaceutical companies devoted themselves to the investigation of
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 and
also
 carried out numerous animal
experiments
.
As a result
,
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a human
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human
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 can get a safe
vaccacine
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vaccine
 without
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 effects.
Although
 animal testing brings a lot of positive sides
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science
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the science
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 field, some oppose it. They believe humans have no moral right to conduct
experiments
 on
animals
.
In addition
, most of the
animals
 died in these researches eventually.
For instance
, I saw
a
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research
of
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 depression
on
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 the magazine
few
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 days ago, that scientists inject new medicines into healthy mice and observe the changes
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 their
behavior
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.
However
, it shows that some rats become irritable and demented. In conclusion,
although
animals
 are not human, they should
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 equally. But the contributions they make are
irreplacable
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irreplaceable
 and have a significant meaning to
humans
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 life. In my
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opinion
opion
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opinion
, I reckon that
animals
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 tests are
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necessary
necessrary
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necessary
 due to the scientific knowledge they gave us.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Animal experimentation
  • Cruelty
  • Ethical dilemmas
  • Medical breakthroughs
  • In vivo testing
  • In vitro testing
  • Bioethics
  • Alternative methods
  • Regulatory oversight
  • Vivisection
  • Animal welfare
  • Pharmacological research
  • Toxicology
  • Clinical trials
  • Moral imperatives
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