In achieving personal happiness, our relationships with family, friends, and colleagues are more important than work and wealth. Do you agree or disagree with this?

The increasing pressures of today’s
money
-driven world can often cause
people
to gravitate toward material items.
However
, true personal
happiness
is rarely achieved through professional endeavours or wealth.
Although
these things may be nice extras, I agree that healthy
relationships
with family, friends and colleagues are the true keys to personal
happiness
.
This
will be shown by analysing the often lonely lives of many wealthy celebrities as well as the advice of older
people
who speak from experience.
Firstly
, the lives of wealthy celebrities often illustrate that
money
cannot buy
happiness
.
For example
, many tremendously wealthy pop icons,
such
as Robbie Williams and Kirsten Dunst, suffer from debilitating depression often linked to extraordinary lifestyles that make it difficult to maintain friendships. As
such
instances show,
money
cannot be labelled an infallible precursor to
happiness
. The manner in which it often isolates
people
suggests that human interaction in the form of family and friendships is much more likely than
money
to be at the foundation of lasting
happiness
in life. The advice from many older
people
regularly reiterates
this
.
For example
, all four of my grandparents claim their
relationships
with family and friends are the experiences that brought them the greatest
happiness
in their lives. As
this
is a common viewpoint among the aged of all countries and cultures, and because the aged simply have more experience with life,
such
an opinion needs to be given precedence when discussing
this
topic.
Thus
, human
relationships
are much more likely to be precursors to personal
happiness
than
money
or professional pursuits. As seen above, professional success and wealth cannot buy true
happiness
and
this
is a realisation that all too often comes in old age.
This
essay has shown that the health of
relationships
with family, friends and colleagues is the genuine catalyst to lasting
happiness
.
Thus
, keeping in touch with
people
is much more than just a courtesy.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • personal happiness
  • strong relationships
  • family
  • friends
  • colleagues
  • work and wealth
  • temporary happiness
  • fulfilling
  • sense of belonging
  • connection
  • meaningful interactions
  • joy
  • fulfillment
  • building and maintaining
  • time and effort
  • communication
  • stress
  • pressure
  • balance
  • well-being
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