Some people think that more money should be spent on protecting endangered species while others think it is a waste of valuable money. What is your opinion?

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A certain group of people suggests that it's mandatory to protect the life of endangered species while the other group reject
this
notion. In my opinion, endangered species must be protected and here are some of my ideas to explain how valuable it is for government to invest money.
Firstly
, The government should invest money to protect them by opening national parks. With
this
, everyone will be taught the importance of endangered species and their effects on nature.
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In addition
Inaddition
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In addition
to that, the invested money can be collected back from people visiting national parks.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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