ome people think that young people should follow the traditions of the society. Others think young people are free to behave as individuals. Discuss both views and give your own opinion. (Culture)

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Nowadays, there are a lot of different types of
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has the right to choose which path they want to take here we are to the two sides from each
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wants the younger generation to follow the traditions and the other
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says that young ones should have their own freedom. We will discuss the two sides.
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my own view, there are some merits and demerits. It is very beneficial that young
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should have their own freedom.
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whom they
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, a person called ben met another person with similar things that they each other likes best so they can grow together and become a better person with
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with other
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,they can have a friend to talk to without facing the loneliness
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so they won't be lonely anymore. After all the evidence that
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have talked why there are some
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recommended follow the traditions of
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society? The best for their mindset to recommend is their
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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