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Title: More and more students are choosing to study at colleges and universities in a foreign country. Do the benefits of studying abroad outweigh the drawbacks

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Many
students
 prioritize studying in foreign educational institutions while choosing the right place. According to me, studying abroad is not only a great way of acquiring academic knowledge but
also
 creates an opportunity to meet a variety of
students
 gathering from various countries as well as cultures. Nowadays,
students
 are not interested to be confined to
the the
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academic boundary. Rather they are figuring out
the
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other ways to be properly creative. The majority of the
students
 think that to cope with the competitive world, they need to know what the people of
others
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other
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 culture like to eat, what kinds of clothes they wear and how they lead their life so that they are able to produce
such
 foods what the citizens of other states prefer and can supply to the different regions.
Secondly
, when the
students
 will return from other kingdoms after completing
education
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their education
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, they will be a resource and will expand
economy
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the economy
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.
For example
, a total of one million
students
 of Pakistan went to the UK for studying and returning home they boosted their economy. So, we should go to
other country
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another country
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 for education to improve the country’s economy.
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