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Title: More and more students are choosing to study at colleges and universities in a foreign country. Do the benefits of studying abroad outweigh the drawbacks

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With the development of transportation, studying overseas has become more and more common. Nowadays, there is an increase in the number of
student
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 who decided to study in a foreign country.
The
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 benefits of it
includes
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expanding
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expending
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expanding
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 one's horizons, getting more opportunities
of
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 experience varied cultures and becoming more competitive and independent.
However
, there are still some flaws
such
 as extremely high cost. For me, the advantages are overweight the disadvantages. I am going to discuss them in the following paragraph.
To begin
 with, living in a foreign country brings good chances to experience exotic cultures and learn to communicate with people from different backgrounds.
Furthermore
,
become
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 more independent is another benefit. Most
of
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the student
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student
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 studying abroad have to get used to a whole new environment without family and
friends'
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friends
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accompany
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.
As a result
, they can always practice
to be
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 independent. Take my friend
for
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 example, having studied in England for merely one year, she learned how to repair a broken water heater and change a
burnt out
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 light bulb.
That is
 a significant improvement for her.
In addition
, having a degree from a foreign university can always leave a good impression in a job interview. In Taiwan,
majority
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 of companies tend to hire people
have
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 studied abroad. Because it indicates that they have better language ability and better communication skills which are important features for an employee. Overall, getting a
bachelor
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bachelor's
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 degree or even higher level diploma is beneficial. It can not only
provides
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 opportunities
of
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for
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 learning to rely on themselves but experience different cultures.
Also
, it is helpful in
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 a position.
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