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Some people think it is better to choose friends who always have the same opinion as them. Other people believe it’s good to have friends who some time disagrees with them. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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In the world, there are existing a varial type of people who freely asserts their own position in the same situation,
although
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 they have had similar
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process of education, the dominant environment and
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relationship with friends. some insist that it is advisable to make
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a friend
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friend
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friends
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 who usually
support
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 my view.
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However
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 others recommend
to get
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a friend
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friend
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friends
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 who sometimes
criticize
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to
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me. I think it is beneficial for me to have pals who sharply advise
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me frequently.
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 and foremost, kind and friendly pals enable me to enhance
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 confidence to shout my opinion. they will show
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 positive reaction to support my sentence
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 it is so absurd and zany. But it is great enough for abate circumstances.
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, it is
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they
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 best way to quickly bond with a new group. telling
unbeat
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upbeat
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 talk may increase the relationship between me and
friend
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 as affirmative words make person open mind in order to get close fastly.
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, criticized people help to tackle the problem as they make me see the issue intuitionally. their harsh language is sometimes
felten
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 the great
pressing
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 to acquire another solution or opinion. but it will accelerate
to resolve
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the issue
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issue
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.
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, their
advise
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 lets me
to
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grow up gradually since we got the feedback to enable
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me to
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 find
new
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 settlement. In conclusion, there
are
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 both
view
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views
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over
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on
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 whether
innocent
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an innocent
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friend
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 will be better or not in a heated debate. In my opinion, I believe that slandering pal will enable me to go forward.
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