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Some people think that paying taxes is their only responsibility towards society while others feel that everyone should do more. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Since the turn of the 21st century, the issue of our responsibility towards the nation has stirred up a number of heated debates among people of different opinions as some people came up with an idea that we, being citizens, only need to pay
taxes
 for a better community,
nonetheless
, other believe that we should carry out more things.
Therefore
, the arguments on both sides of
this
 controversial issue will be discussed in the following paragraphs in turn, and
finally
, my opinion will be given. On one hand, some opponents are quick to point out the fact that it is the main duty of the government to take full responsibility for our community as
taxes
 are paid to them for
this
 task regularly.
For example
, in
this
first
-moving world, everyone is busy dealing with work-life balance and daily pressure in a stressful environment and so there is no time left to share to do good things for a better society.
Therefore
, paying
taxes
 could be the only thing most people can do.
On the other hand
, other proponents have
also
 expressed that everyone is in charge of building better surroundings.
Therefore
, citizens should participate in volunteering programs which let them in touch with the early, orphans or preserve the environment as no one is busy all the time. Having both sides of arguments considered, both bright and dark sides occupy each face of any issue, and the idea of carrying out more good things
besides
 paying
taxes
 for our society is no exception. In my humble opinion, to be a responsible citizen is a lot more than paying
taxes
 to the government.
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