Title: More and more students are choosing to study at colleges and universities in a foreign country. Do the benefits of studying abroad outweigh the drawbacks

The number of people who are eager to get an education abroad either at colleges or universities is increasing day by day. it is obvious that they are cautious with their few disadvantages and I completely agree with
this
statement for some reasons which I am going to explain in the
further
stage. On the one hand ,studying in any foreign country helps you to learn a particular language deeply
due to
you are surrounded by the natural environment.
For example
,some people travel abroad for a
while
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promotion in their accents.
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.
Therefore
,they get both fellows and knowledge. On the other hand, getting a degree in a foreign country allows you to find a more relevant job ,for the reason you have already investigated the zone and its opportunities.
For instance
. my sibling is in the same situation and he finds his favourite work on Google company.
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working there, he was pleased with all the innovative ways and
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a number of. new projects.
Finally
, it is undeniable every motion has drawbacks ,
however
, studying abroad is getting more popular and gives a number of students a chance to get an education abroad
as well as
provides them with their dream job . In my opinion, it is impossible to compel somebody to stay anywhere,so we have to give them an opportunity to realise their goals and broaden their horizons.
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