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Nowadays the way many people interact with each other has changed because of technology. In what ways has technology affected the types of relationships people make? Has this become a positive or negative development?

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In recent years
technology
 has affected
relationships
 and caused obvious impacts on the interaction between
people
. The change that happened in our lives and particularly in our
relationships
 due to
technology
 cannot be neglected.
Technology
 makes our world like a small village and helps
people
 to create long-distance
relationships
. In the past,
people
 interacted and made
relationships
 only with their relatives and neighbours who are living in the same place and usually had the same culture and background,
however
 by introducing
technology
 in the communication field the case is different. Nowadays modern telecommunication devices make it very easy to create
relationships
 with
people
 from all over the world and share ideas from different
cultures
 and change the limited
relationships
 to be more open and international. The positive side of
this
 development in the type of
relationships
 cannot be denied.
First
 of all, while
technology
 eases communication and provides the chance to create an international relationship it enhances the exchange of
cultures
.
For example
, we know many traditional meals and clothes for others
cultures
 from our friends on Facebook, Instagram and Twitter.
Secondly
, global interaction helps us to build a wide international network with
people
 who have the same interest in study or work.
As a result
, we can share our experiences and expertise with them and take their advice.
Technology
 helps us to create long-distance
relationships
 that
enables
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 us to know others’
cultures
 and facilitate the exchange of experiences and knowledge through our network .
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • technology
  • interact
  • relationships
  • connectivity
  • communication
  • online
  • face-to-face
  • friendships
  • romantic relationships
  • family dynamics
  • positive
  • negative
  • development
  • effects
  • formation
  • ease
  • impacts
  • communities
  • connect
  • interaction
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