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People today can shop, work and communicate with others via the Internet instead of face-to-face communications. Is it a positive or negative development?

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It is true that
people
 tend to do more online activities like shopping, working and talking with others than ever before.
Although
 there are some drawbacks
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Internet
-based communications, I would argue that there are far more benefits. On the one hand, there are several disadvantages of using too much the
Internet
. to start with, the main drawback of
this
 trend toward communications is that it can lead to isolation. Before the
Internet
,
people
 would frequently go out to meet friends,
for example
 in cafes, bars or shopping malls, whereas now
people
 prefer to stay at home alone, chatting and shopping online, rather than meet others outdoors.
As a result
,
people
 are starting to spend the majority of their time alone which causes a gap between them and their families or friends.
Furthermore
, another issue is that
people
 who rely on online activities are prone to getting physical problems,
such
 as obesity, and backache , because they usually live a sedentary lifestyle.
Lastly
, making new friends and purchases online are risky.
in other words
,
people
 can assume fake identities online and hide their true intentions.
On the other hand
, despite the negatives mentioned above, I believe that online activities are a positive development because they can benefit our lives in many irreplaceable ways.
First
 of all, shopping and working online are usually more efficient and cost-effective because we can save our time and money on commuting.
Therefore
, we have more energy to concentrate on our work and study.
Moreover
, the
Internet
 can overcome geographic barriers and provide more options for communications.
For instance
, a Chinese student in China can discuss problems with a British teacher in England via online courses.
Lastly
, it is possible for some
people
 to continue their business by using the
Internet
 on special occasions like the COVID-19 pandemic. In conclusion, while
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 recognise that there are possible disadvantages of online communication, I consider it to be a positive development overall.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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