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Several languages are in danger of extinction because they are spoken by very small number of people*. *Some say that government should spend public money on saving these languages, while others believe that it would be a waste of money*. *Discuss both these views and give your opinion.*

#languages #danger #extinction #people* #*some #government #money #waste #money* #*discuss
All around the
world
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 there are more than 6,000
languages
;
however
, a grand amount of
languages
 are disappearing because they are spoken by fewer
people
. Many
people
 opine that the government should invest public
money
 in order to save these
languages
, while others claim that it is a waste of
money
. In the following
essay
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 I will take a look at both sides of the argument.
First
 of all, many
people
 believe in order to preserve a
language
 the government should spend a bunch of
money
.
This
 amount of
money
 could help in hiring more interpreters or even more teachers, so they can teach domestic students and international students.
For example
, in my country, Bolivia, schools are obligated to teach a native
language
 like Aymara or Quechua, so the students can easily interact with native speakers of that kind. To sum up, for these
people
 investing in
money
 is an excellent way to save those
languages
.
On the other hand
, many individuals think that spending public capital so a
language
 can still existing, it is a waste of
money
.
For instance
, they think that it is better to invest that
money
 in hospitals, schools, or even food.
Likewise
, we are using
this
money
 on useful resources that can benefit the population. They really do not care if a
language
 became extinct.
Although
this
last
 argument sounds reasonable, in my opinion preserving a
language
 is a beautiful way of bringing tourists to the country.
In addition
, a
language
 for many
people
 is very important in their environment and history, especially the elderly
people
, because they want other' generations can be able to speak it.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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