In some countries children are engaged in some kind of paid work. Some people regard this as completely wrong, whereas/ while others consider it as valuable work experience, important for learning and taking responsibility.

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Nowadays, more and more students are having
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jobs, some of them
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to earn more pocket money for themselves,
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to subsidize their families. But is it really necessary for
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to find a
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rather than study more? On the one hand, some people might think it is a good way for children who have a
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to learn something beyond
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school
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, they not only can learn how to socialize with other employees but
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how different the
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, having a
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during
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can help you understand the
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of making money
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so that you would become more mature and would not splurge on something you want rather than actually need it.
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, others insist that children should spend their whole
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learning
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because they think it is the only way to increase their children’s competitiveness in the future. If you don’t keep
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grades well in
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, it is impossible for you to get
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tickets to enter
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famous enterprises
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, the opportunity costs are too big to
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during
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. As a student who doesn’t have any degree yet, the only payment you can get is the basic one, so why don’t you study hard right now and search
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high paid
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in the future? As far as I am concerned, I think it depends on what kind of
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you
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in, if you
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in a company
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related to your major during
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, it will be seen as a great experience when you are searching for jobs.
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in a place that
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have any expertise, I think it is really a waste of
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Child labor
  • Exploitation
  • Minimum age
  • Work experience
  • Survival
  • Taking responsibility
  • Education
  • Poverty
  • Legal restrictions
  • Physical toll
  • Psychological impact
  • Cultural perceptions
  • International conventions
  • Economic impact
  • Work-study programs
  • Skilled labor
  • Unskilled labor
  • Developing economies
  • Moral implications
  • Professional development
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