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Young people are often influenced in their behaviors and situations by others in the same age. This is called "peer pressure". Do the disadvantages outweigh the advantages？

#people #behaviors #situations #age #peer #pressure #advantages？
Young generations tend to be influenced in their
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attitudes
 and situations by same age
people
.
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 the young generations believe
this
 is a preferable way to avoid peer
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pressure
presure
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pressure
, I believe the disadvantages
outweight
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outweigh
 the advantages because they have no life experiences to give a
piece
 of
advice
 to others. Many teens tend to follow
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a friend's
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friend's
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friends'
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piece
 of
advice
 because they want to feel accepted,
however
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 these peers have no good habits or
conducts
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. It is often to hear that pre-teens imitated
behaviors
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behaviours
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 because they need to feel
love
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 and accepted.
However
, most of the
times
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 these
acttituds
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attitudes
 are not
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accepted
acceptable
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accepted
 by schools or authorities.
For instance
, In California, most of the
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teenagers
teenayers
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teenagers
 love to have
tatoos
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tattoos
 because they want to imitate their friend's appearance to feel accepted in a group.
However
, I believe many of
young
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the young
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 generations
distortion
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they
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their
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phisical
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physical
 aspects by piercing their
sking
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skin
 or drawing figures on their body which many times these acts cause diseases. Asking for a
piece
 of
advice
to
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 tutors or parents is a more preferable situation for young students because they need
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guidance
guidence
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guidance
on
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in
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 life
by
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 wiser
people
. It is easier for these adults to guide these young
people
 to avoid many drawbacks in life like getting in
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.
For instance
,
in
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the
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Fullerton
College
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 many
somophorns
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homophones
 feel frustrated in
the
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first
 year in college;
however
, tutors can guide them to avoid making wrong decisions that might hurt their future. I believe
this
 is a
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preferable
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preferrable
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 method to ask for a
piece
 of
advice
 because these
people
 have plenty of knowledge to influence the students in a proper way.
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Although
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Although
 it is easier to imitate bad behaviours to avoid peer pressure, it is
preferable
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the preferable
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 way to ask for guidance and try no getting into bad influences and
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behaviours
behaviour
behavious
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behaviour
. For these reasons the drawbacks far outnumber the positives.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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