Young people are often influenced in their behaviors and situations by others in the same age. This is called "peer pressure". Do the disadvantages outweigh the advantages?

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Young generations tend to be influenced in their
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attitudes
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is a preferable way to avoid peer
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to others. Many teens tend to follow
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because they want to feel accepted,
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these peers have no good habits or
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. It is often to hear that pre-teens imitated
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because they need to feel
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and accepted.
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attitudes
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accepted
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teenagers
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teenagers
love to have
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, I believe many of
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generations
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they
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phisical
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physical
aspects by piercing their
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tutors or parents is a more preferable situation for young students because they need
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life
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wiser
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. It is easier for these adults to guide these young
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to avoid many drawbacks in life like getting in
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many
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first
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year in college;
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, tutors can guide them to avoid making wrong decisions that might hurt their future. I believe
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have plenty of knowledge to influence the students in a proper way.
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it is easier to imitate bad behaviours to avoid peer pressure, it is
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way to ask for guidance and try no getting into bad influences and
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behaviours
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behaviour
. For these reasons the drawbacks far outnumber the positives.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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