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Some people think that giving aids to the poor countries has more negative impacts than positive ones. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays, It is undeniable that
,
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 Countries are getting much more connected with each other. It is believed by
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 masses that there
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 cons than pros while providing help to undeveloped regions. I completely disagree with the statement and are several seasons that will be articulated in upcoming paragraphs. The predominant, reason is development, to elucidate,In
this
 cutting edge era,It is hard for poor nations to develop due to
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 in competition level rich countries like
US
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,
China
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 can provide aid to them
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which
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can be
relief
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 for them to enhance their country
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. In 2008, Russia was destroyed by china with the help of nuclear weapons, after that America invested in Russia to rebuild its Infrastructure & and it became again developed in 2010.
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, equality can be maintained in the land by which they can take help in future from other nations in case of any mishappening. Moving
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 bonds between the regions can become stronger, and by that, in case of any ,
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 they can conquerer it. ,
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 they can share their funds well as ideas to enhance the quality of their jobs.
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, during World War II, India and America fought together by providing weapons and money.
also
 they won the war due to sharing. Another reason is that moral values can be increased. To elaborate, in
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 contemporary epoch, almost all
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people have human ethics and they always try to help each other
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, if developed society can give aid to
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the poor
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 state, their image and status can be increased at the world level. ,
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 most of the countries are following
this
 trend by which they can increase the tourism level in their region. To sum
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 everything that has been stated so. far,
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 am strongly against the statement Because of
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develop
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, bonds, equality and status.
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