The only way to ensure road safety is to give much stricter punishments on driving offences. To what extent do you agree?

One of the
way
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ways
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to ensure
road
safety
is
giving
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stricter
punishments
on
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for
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driving offences. I completely agree
to
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with
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this
statement. To avoid breaking the law
drivers
should follow the special
rules
.
Stricking
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Striking
Sticking
punishments
will correct
this
situation. To keep
road
safety
,
first
people
have to follow the
rules
to avoid taking stricter
punishments
. Stricter
punishments
will change the situation if the person
do
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not ensure
road
safety
its
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it's
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bad for himself and for others. When
person
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a person
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drives very fast he can have a
car
accident or at least he will take stricter punishment. In most
of
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apply
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the
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apply
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situations
drivers
in
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are in
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a hurry and
its
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it's
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the reason why they take stricter
punishments
. For keeping peoples status
in
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at
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the same level government create special
rules
like: do not drive a
car
with more than 90
killometress
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kilometres
,
do
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and do
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not parking
car
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a car
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where you must not
parking
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your
car
. The
people
also
should follow the
rules
. If the
drivers
ensure
road
safety
but
people
who are not driving a
car
do not ensure
road
safety
it is not true from their position. The
people
and the
drivers
should follow the
rules
and
than
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then
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they can ensure
road
safety
.
For
example
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the
stastics
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statistics
show that in countries where
drivers
and
people
take stricter
punishments
in
this
country bad situation like
car
accidents is less than
other
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in other
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countries. In conclusion. I can say that if the person
ensure
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ensures
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road
safety
it will
safe
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save
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someones
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someone's
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life or their life. I absolutely agree with
this
statement
people
must ensure
road
safety
no
mater they
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matter the
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driver or just
people
without
car
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a car
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. We must know that the
rules
is
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are
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to
keeping
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us in
safety
. Stricter punishment is the best way to ensure
road
safety
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • deter
  • reckless behavior
  • psychological deterrence
  • adhere
  • penalties
  • awareness campaigns
  • knowledge and skills
  • technological solutions
  • advanced safety features
  • automatic braking systems
  • lane departure warnings
  • traffic surveillance
  • enforce laws
  • socio-economic impact
  • disproportionately
  • broader social issues
  • community engagement
  • road safety culture
  • collective responsibility
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