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The only way to ensure road safety is to give much stricter punishments on driving offences. To what extent do you agree?

#road #safety #punishments #offences
One of the
way
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ways
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 to ensure
road
safety
 is
giving
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to give
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 stricter
punishments
on
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for
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 driving offences. I completely agree
to
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with
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this
 statement. To avoid breaking the law
drivers
 should follow the special
rules
.
Stricking
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Striking
Sticking
punishments
 will correct
this
 situation. To keep
road
safety
,
first
people
 have to follow the
rules
 to avoid taking stricter
punishments
. Stricter
punishments
 will change the situation if the person
do
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does
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 not ensure
road
safety
its
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it's
it is
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 bad for himself and for others. When
person
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a person
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 drives very fast he can have a
car
 accident or at least he will take stricter punishment. In most
of
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apply
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the
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apply
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situations
drivers
in
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are in
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 a hurry and
its
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it's
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 the reason why they take stricter
punishments
. For keeping peoples status
in
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at
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 the same level government create special
rules
 like: do not drive a
car
 with more than 90
killometress
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kilometres
,
do
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and do
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 not parking
car
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a car
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 where you must not
parking
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park
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 your
car
. The
people
also
 should follow the
rules
. If the
drivers
 ensure
road
safety
 but
people
 who are not driving a
car
 do not ensure
road
safety
 it is not true from their position. The
people
 and the
drivers
 should follow the
rules
 and
than
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then
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 they can ensure
road
safety
.
For
example
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,example
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 the
stastics
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statistics
 show that in countries where
drivers
 and
people
 take stricter
punishments
 in
this
 country bad situation like
car
 accidents is less than
other
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in other
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 countries. In conclusion. I can say that if the person
ensure
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ensures
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road
safety
 it will
safe
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save
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someones
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someone's
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 life or their life. I absolutely agree with
this
 statement
people
 must ensure
road
safety
 no
mater they
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matter the
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 driver or just
people
 without
car
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a car
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. We must know that the
rules
is
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are
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 to
keeping
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keep
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 us in
safety
. Stricter punishment is the best way to ensure
road
safety
.
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  • deter
  • reckless behavior
  • psychological deterrence
  • adhere
  • penalties
  • awareness campaigns
  • knowledge and skills
  • technological solutions
  • advanced safety features
  • automatic braking systems
  • lane departure warnings
  • traffic surveillance
  • enforce laws
  • socio-economic impact
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  • community engagement
  • road safety culture
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