Smoking not only harms the smoker, but also those who are nearby. Therefore, smoking should be banned in public places. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Nowadays smoking in public
places
has become a huge concern to the general public. some people say that smoking should be burned in public
places
has it
harm
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the
smoker
and the people who are nearby.
i
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strongly agree that it should be restricted in public
places
.
this
essay will
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discuss
dicuss
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discuss
the reasons why smoking should be burned in public
places
.
Firstly
, smoking is hazardous to
human
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body has it causes cardiovascular diseases
such
as heart diseases, cancer and stroke. so smoking in public
places
does not only affect the
smoker
alone. it
also
put
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non-
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non-smokers
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smokers
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smokers'
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health in danger
for instance
in
europe
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Europe
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passive smoking cause 1.2
millions
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premature deaths per
years
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and these deaths are mostly caused by cancer and respiratory diseases.
moreover
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it is believed that
by
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introducing smoke -
free
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environment
and smoke bans in public
places
will significantly
reduces
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the exposure of
non
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non-smoker
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smoker
to toxic fume.
On the other hand
, smoking
cigaratte
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cigarette
cigarettes
in public areas is not good for the
environment
as it causes environmental pollution by releasing a toxic air
polutant
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pollutant
pollutants
into the atmosphere.
for example
when
smoker
throw
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their cigarette butts on the ground. these butts are
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harmful
harmfull
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harmful
to the
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environment
enviroment
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environment
because they take so long to decompose.
therefore
if
smoking
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the smoking
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ban
is enforce
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in public
places
the littering of
of
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these butts will no longer be an issue and the
environment
will be
cleanier
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cleaner
clearer
for everyone. In conclusion, banning smoking in public areas will be
will be
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effective
to
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for
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the
environment
and
to
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for
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the
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apply
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non-
smoker
.
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