Smoking not only harms the smoker, but also those who are nearby. Therefore, smoking should be banned in public places. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Nowadays smoking in public
places
has become a huge concern to the general public. some people say that smoking should be burned in public places
has it harm
the Correct subject-verb agreement
harms
smoker
and the people who are nearby. i
strongly agree that it should be restricted in public Change the capitalization
I
places
. this
essay will Correct your spelling
discuss
dicuss
the reasons why smoking should be burned in public Correct your spelling
discuss
places
.
Firstly
, smoking is hazardous to human
body has it causes cardiovascular diseases Add an article
the human
such
as heart diseases, cancer and stroke. so smoking in public places
does not only affect the smoker
alone. it also
put
Correct subject-verb agreement
puts
non-
Correct your spelling
non-smokers
smokers
health in danger Change noun form
smokers'
smoker's
for instance
in europe
passive smoking cause 1.2 Change the capitalization
Europe
millions
premature deaths per Change to singular
million
years
and these deaths are mostly caused by cancer and respiratory diseases.Fix the agreement mistake
year
moreover
it is believed that Add a comma
,moreover
by
introducing smoke -Change preposition
apply
free
Correct article usage
a free
environment
and smoke bans in public places
will significantly reduces
the exposure of Change the verb form
reduce
non
Add a hyphen
non-smoker
smoker
to toxic fume.
On the other hand
, smoking cigaratte
in public areas is not good for the Correct your spelling
cigarette
cigarettes
environment
as it causes environmental pollution by releasing a toxic air polutant
into the atmosphere. Correct your spelling
pollutant
pollutants
for example
when smoker
throw
their cigarette butts on the ground. these butts are Change the verb form
throws
Correct your spelling
harmful
harmfull
to the Correct your spelling
harmful
Correct your spelling
environment
enviroment
because they take so long to decompose. Correct your spelling
environment
therefore
if smoking
ban Add an article
the smoking
is enforce
in public Change the verb form
is enforced
places
the littering of of
these butts will no longer be an issue and the Remove the redundancy
apply
environment
will be cleanier
for everyone.
In conclusion, banning smoking in public areas will be Correct your spelling
cleaner
clearer
will be
effective Remove the redundancy
apply
to
the Change preposition
for
environment
and to
Change preposition
for
the
non-Correct article usage
apply
smoker
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