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in some countries, people prefer to rent a house to live in, while in other countries people prefer to buy their own house. does renting a housr have more advantages or disadvantages than buying a house?

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It has been argued by some, that renting a
property
 is much better than buying
one
, while others claim that having your own
house
 is much better than renting. Personally, I find myself inclined to advocate the
second
 opinion, which is to buy a
property
, for a plethora of reasons. ,
However
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 the
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upcoming
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up coming
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 paragraphs will list the demerits of renting a
property
 with apt reasons. The
first
 reason to consider renting a
house
 as an incorrect decision to take
,
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 is the possibility of being asked to move at any time.
Besides
 that, the money paid every month could be made as
a
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mortgage monthly
payments
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 to own your own
house
,
in other words
, you could invest your money to end up being a landlord rather than
being
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a tenant. Another important reason to highlight
,
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 is that people, who rent accommodation to live in, are unable to renovate or decorate as they desire, Actually, they sign contracts which force them by law to maintain the rented
house
 as it is.
However
, a good example to illustrate
this
 point, is that many studies have shown that the majority of tenants expressed that they do not feel they are settled or comfortable in a rented place
,
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 because it is owned by another
one
, some of them expressed that by seeing it is not our home. To conclude, the aforementioned points clearly illustrate the reasons behind my support to buy a
property
 rather than renting
one
.
Although
, renting a
house
 has a lot of pros,
such
 as the ability to relocate easily, or to downsize in case of lack of money,
however
, the advantages, which have been mentioned above, are eclipsed by the disadvantages.
Therefore
, I prefer to buy a
property
 rather than rent
one
.
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