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The earth nowadays are more and more pollutions and affects the habitation. Do the Government reserves the budget to change the habitation or not? What is your opinion?

Obviously, our planet is polluted after hundreds of years of industry development. We can see changes happening from the sea to the forest and especially the global warming phenomenon. I believe that our planet can be changed by the
Government
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who
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that
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using
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uses
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budget
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the budget
a budget
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 for
environment
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environmental
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 improvement As usual, the
Government
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 has a rights and reserves budget to change our habitation to a brighter future by high-taxing polluted technology, rejecting backward products, decreasing unnecessary packaging or encouraging green energy.
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Secondly
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 the
Government
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 can use the budget for education from early school as well as research and development of new materials. In short, the
Government
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 is not able to change our habitation after a night but by using their power the
Government
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 can keep our planet greenery day after day from my point of view.

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