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The crime rate nawadays is decreasing compared to the past due to advance technology which can prevent and solve crime. Do you agree or disagree?

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At present, it is believed by a number of
people
 that the account of evil works is reducing compared to the earlier development of
technology
 which can restrain as well as evolve crime.
However
, I definitely do agree with
this
 statement and
this
 essay will try to prove my perspective too. It can't be denied that today man has to think twice before doing any negative things. Because now the population has advanced
technology
 by which they can immediately know who is the criminal!
For example
, if
people
 want to do thieving and robbery from a house, they will be caught by a Closed-Circuit Television camera
that is
 fitted in the house. In sum, if human beings do any bad work by hiding, they will
also
 be arrested by their DNA.
For instance
, if a person murdered a man, police can recognise the murderer by matching the DNA consisting of both the victim's and the criminal's blood.
Moreover
, sometimes investigators can track the location of the evildoer by their
last
 call recordings.
However
, laws are very strict today and the
people
 who have gone through a life of a prisoner, don't want to go there anymore as that place resembles as horrible as hell. Recently, research had done on the
people
 of America and the result came that the rate of devil work has slightly decreased due to the implementation of strict laws and
technology
. In conclusion, in spite of doing crimes,
people
 should do good work as they know they will not be left easily if would arrest once due to the presence of developed
technology
.
Submitted by Rubel Miah on

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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