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over population of urban areas has lead to numerous problems. identify one or two serious ones and suggest ways that government and individuals tackle these problems.

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The bar chart compares the amount of time that people from four different countries spent doing activities while on holiday in Greece in August 2019. The activities were going to the coast, visiting a variety of attractions, and reading. Overall, the visitor spent the most time reading books, whereas they spent the least time visiting places. The Chinese visitor spent the longest reading books with a total of eight
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, the Brazilian visitor spent the longest at the coast with a total of six
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. Both tourists from China and America saw similar trends. Reading books took the lead, followed by going to the beach, with three and four
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 every day, respectively. Travelling to other places took the
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 place. It is worth noting that Chinese tourists saw the greatest differences in reading and visiting by 7
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 people, Turkish and Brazilian exhibited the same trends, beach topped the list.
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 came reading
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 and visiting came in
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. The number of going to the beach Brazilians was three times the number of visiting places.
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