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in three different bakeries in Calgary, over a ten-year period between 2000 and 2010. Overall, the changes in annual earnings in Amandine Bakery exhibited an upward trend, whereas Mari Bakeshop and Bolo Cakery showed a decline. In 2000, the amount of money in Mari Bakeshop took the lead at just 80,000 dollars,
then
went up to 95,000 in 2001, yet fell back to its former figure in 2003. It saw the greatest differences in the annual amount of money, which was at around 90,000 dollars in 2004,
then
dropped considerably to hit the bottom of 40,000 in 2010.
In contrast
, the profit per year at Amandine Bakery remained constant at approximately 55,000 between 2000 and 2005. It is witnessed that
this
figure overtook the earnings of Mari Bakeshop after 2006, and reached the highest figure among the three bakeries at over 100,000 dough in 2010. Bolo Cakery came in
last
at only 20,000 cabbage for yearly profit in 2010.
However
, it was a steady rise to over 60,000 in 2010, which was three times higher than the amount of total a decade ago.
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