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some people believe that too many resources and attention are devoted to the protection of wild animals and birds. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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The line graph illustrates how visitor numbers changed on a Caribbean island at one-year intervals from 2010 to 2017. Overall, the
number
 of
visitors
 in all three sectors increased in
this
 seven years period. A similar trend could be seen between the graph
of
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total and that of
visitors
 enjoying cruise ships. What conspicuously stood out in
this
 graph is the dramatic increase in the total visitor numbers, which grew from one
million
visitors
 in 2010 to over triple that figure in 2017. Even though stagnation could be seen between 2015 and 2016, tourist
number
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 in
this
 sector increased almost all year.
Next
 focus on tourists on cruise ships and
a
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 island. The
number
 of tourists who stayed on cruise ships increased from 2012 onwards, from one-quarter
million
 people in 2012 to just 2
million
of
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visitors
. The
number
 of
this
 sector surpassed that of
visitors
 staying on an island between 2015 and 2016, at nearly 1.4
million
 tourists.
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