it is important for people to take risks, both in their professional lives and their personal lives. do you think the advantages of taking risks outweigh the disadvantages? give reasons for you answers and include any relevant examples from you own knowledge or experience

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with the increasingly large average of quality in life and workplace, people
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belive
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that they will be able to have more luxury and flashy dairy, not risks.
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taking problems
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both merits and demerits, I believe the benefits outweigh the
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disadvantages
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disadvantages
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and foremost, people who have a problem will settle serious
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easily if they resolve the problems before it would be more serious. I mean, they have the chance to solve the problem fastly and
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, they will attain
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great
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their colleagues, friends and family. it
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our professional and personal lives to enrich.
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, my friend who suffers from severe academic
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depression and felt the
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to study hard than before. I think she needed some consultant with
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or dome-doctor. so I recommend her
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diagnosed
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diagnosis
so that she overcame her risks with could have become
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extreme disease.
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, these situations when we occur some severe matters could assemble sustainable mind control. we will get a large amount of stress as we endeavour to overcome these matters regarding personal
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or company
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and many more. we could learn how to conduct
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feeling for these conditions.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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