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Several languages are in danger of extinction because they are spoken by very small number of people*. *Some say that government should spend public money on saving these languages, while others believe that it would be a waste of money*. *Discuss both these views and give your opinion.*

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Few
languages
 are on the brink of being forgotten because few
people
 know and use them. It is often argued that the administration should invest funds to save these dialects while others think that it would misspend.
This
 essay will explain both sides before giving a conclusion. On the one hand, having to spend the money to save some ancient
languages
 that our ancestors used will be shown that the newer generations still value the heritage that the older ones left them. The national council can preserve these
languages
 by several means.
First
, the government should issue mandatory learning of these dialects to public schools like elementary and high
school
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. At
such
 a young age, they will be taught the importance of their mother tongue and it should be used and proudly galavanting to other nations.
Second
, the administration should have a program on tv and radio to promote these dialects, for ,instance an educational channel that kids will love and enjoy.
Lastly
, a
language
 seminar that will encourage
people
 especially, those that lived in the countryside to be aware and well-informed on their country's forgotten
languages
.
On the other hand
, many new and popular
languages
 have emerged and are easy to understand that the
people
 used. These
languages
 are more evolved and used by most
people
 in different nations. Nowadays, individuals don't care what
language
 they are speaking, as long as the other person understands what is being spoken and they can communicate well. They will choose the most well-known
language
 that the majority is using to stick to a
language
 in selective
people
 know. In my opinion, even if the government provide funds to help preserve their
language
 in order for it not to be extinct, I believe that majority of
people
 will still use the most common
language
 that society has been using.
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