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Today, more and more tourists are visiting places where conditions are difficult, such as the Sahara desert or Antarctica. What are the benefits and disadvantages for people who visit such places?

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Recently, quite a number of excursionists travelled to
places
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 where
conditions
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 are not suitable,
such
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 as the
Sahara
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 desert and
Antarctica
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. Visiting
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places
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 is beneficial to the traveller but, can
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 predispose them to unforeseen situations.
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, some tourists travel around the world to gain knowledge and appreciate nature in a particular region they visit. It gives them
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-hand information on the environment,
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, the culture, food and way of life.
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, some travellers visit
places
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 like the
Antarctica
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 and
Sahara
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 desert for the purposes of research. Researchers visit these
places
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 to get data and statistics on subjects in that area.
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 types of plants, trees, types of wild animals and species of aquatic life that can be found around that type of environment.
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 there are benefits in site seeing, there are undesirable events that can occur when visiting areas like the
Sahara
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 desert and
Antarctica
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. Tourists can be exposed to extreme weather
conditions
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 ,especially in
Antarctica
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. Freezing
conditions
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 in
Antarctica
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 can expose the site seer to some unhealthy
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 as frostbite and hypothermia,
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 exposure to too much heat in the
Sahara
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 deserts can cause dehydration.
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, travellers can be vulnerable to dangerous animals that can be fatal or cause injury to part of the body. Examples of
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 animals are snakes and scorpions. In conclusion, tourism can be beneficial in terms of finding new things but, can as well expose the tourist to dangerous
conditions
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 like hypothermia and injury.
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