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Some people billy's death professionals suggest doctors and ingenious should really get to work in the country hi abhijeet their training other lily they shoot bc to work in another country is there wish discuss both views and give your opinion.

#people #death #professionals #doctors #work #country #hi #abhijeet #bc
It is considered by some that several
source
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 of bread like doctors and engineers must be
need
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 to provide their service where they had done their study. While there are others
believe
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 that it is better to travel abroad.
Although
 I think that it is useful to
saying
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 trained
country
 but I do believe that
travelled
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into
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foreign
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a foreign
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country
 is beneficial for certain jobs.
First
 and foremost, many think it is working in the
country
 where they
skilled
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.
This
 is one of the excellent
way
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 to demonstrate their responsibilities to the
country
 because of government provide education ,healthcare,economically support to make them doctor and engineer. Another explanation is that when they have left the
country
 where they trained, the
country
get
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 damaged economically and socially.
Finally
, when
highly
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a highly
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 qualified person like doctors and engineers and like them, there are migrate
into
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to
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different
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the different
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country
 it create
professionally
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a professionally
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 problematic situation,
for example
, when underdeveloped countries people
immigrant
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into
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to
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other
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another country
other countries
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country
 it
result
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results
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in the loss of 10 unskilled jobs, which is a clear drawback for that
country
.
On the other hand
, having the opportunity to work
other
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in other
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 countries make them more efficient and scholar because of, working with
highly
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standard people in
develop
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developed
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country
 which
nurchur
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nurture
 their skills and brush up
there
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their
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 working capacity.
Secondly
, by migrating
another
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to another
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 leaving place they can able to
fulfill
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fulfil
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 their dream, for
instant
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an instant
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, they enable
i
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I
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 to get standard salary,
lexious
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luxurious
 and secured life leaving facilities. To sum up, despite the different views,
I
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it
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 can be said that migration is useful for
numbers
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 of professional people like
as
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apply
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doctors and engineers.
Therefore
, they ought to be
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independent
independented
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independent
 to move whenever and where they wish.
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