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Plastic bags, plastic bottles and plastic packaging are bad for the environment. What damage does plastic do to the environment? What can be done by governments and individuals to solve this problem?

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Plastic
 is one of the most popular materials for packaging goods. Its wide use has caused
an
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irreversable
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irreversible
 damage to the environment.
This
 essay will discuss these threats and how governments and individuals can play an important role to solve these problems.
Firstly
,
plastic
 is a non-biodegradable material, which means it cannot be decomposed by microorganisms.
As a result
 of
this
, once produced, it will be present forever. It is
also
 harmful
for
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the
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stray animals, many of
which
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 end up
injesting
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ingesting
injecting
it
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from
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 trash and face deadly consequences like choking.
Secondly
, if it is burnt
then
 its smoke contributes to air pollution, which is one of the biggest environmental problems faced by us.
Finally
, the
plastic
 dump present in seas
also
 poses difficulty to aquatic life as it hinders the growth of aquatic plants and
hence
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contributes to marine ecological imbalance. It is estimated that if we continue to use
plastic
with
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 the pace we are using now, there will be more of it in
seas
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 than the fish.
Therefore
, it is very important to put its
usage
 to an end. Governments can help to solve
this
 problem by banning its
usage
 in day-to-day life and
encourage
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 the
usage
 of packaging materials made out of paper. They can
also
 educate individuals about the damages that are caused by the
usage
 of polythene.
Moreover
, individuals can play their part by using reusable water bottles
instead
 of one-time-use
plastic
 bottles. While shopping, people can carry their own bags to keep their purchased items rather than relying on
poly-bags
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poly bags
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. In conclusion, we should all realise that the threat to
environment
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 by
plastic
 is real and we should all contribute to
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fight
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 against it
,
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 because
with
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 just a few changes in our lifestyle, we can reduce its
usage
 to a great extent.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • plastic pollution
  • ecosystems
  • wildlife
  • climate change
  • fossil fuels
  • air pollution
  • strict regulations
  • plastic consumption
  • eco-friendly alternatives
  • sustainable packaging
  • recycling facilities
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