Some people use technology to take advice for their medical problems rather than seeing a doctor. why this is so? it is positive or negative development according to you?

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very common that
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the internet to research
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doctors.
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a negative development. There are two main
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why
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feel it is a negative development.
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,
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are not ready to go to the hospital before doing
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hundreds of
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internet sources. Even folk cannot know whether the
health
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article that they have read is posted by the medical
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professionals
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professionals
.
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, one of my
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affected
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by serious back pain. He neglect to visit the
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after he googled about his symptoms and he assumed
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that he
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this
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because of his back disc bulge. After a few
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he
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decided
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decided
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a doctor
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check-up due to the severe pain
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his back.
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Doctor
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examined him
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and found
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that he
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diagnosed
with
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a hernia
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which
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the back pain,
then
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the doctor
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suggested
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to
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surgery.
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,
people
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blindly
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the
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podcast, social media,
online
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and online
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health
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suggestions by
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unknown person on
internet
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the internet
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. Most
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people
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not
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do not
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want to spend their money
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doctors
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consultation. If they
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for free even
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advice for their
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issues, they are simply going without thinking
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consequences. One of my
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brother
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used to have
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headaches regularly. He was very careless about it and
also
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not wanted to spend money. He took some free
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consultations
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from
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the
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online but they were wrong and it ended up with the 1000 dollars
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treatment
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treatment
when he meet the
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finally
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. the
doctor
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said
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said
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that it was in the early stage if he come earlier we could have easily solved it with
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simple medication. TO Conclude,
people
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using technology to know about
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their
thier
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their
health
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issue is totally wrong.
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always should get
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advice from
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ceritified
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certified
doctors if they find any abnormal changes in their body
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