Some people use technology to take advice for their medical problems rather than seeing a doctor. why this is so? it is positive or negative development according to you?

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doctors.

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a negative development. There are two main

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feel it is a negative development.

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internet sources. Even folk cannot know whether the

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surgery.

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consultation. If they

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for free even

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advice for their

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consequences. One of my

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headaches regularly. He was very careless about it and

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online but they were wrong and it ended up with the 1000 dollars

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that it was in the early stage if he come earlier we could have easily solved it with

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simple medication. TO Conclude,

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using technology to know about

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their

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advice from

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ceritified

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certified

doctors if they find any abnormal changes in their body

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Some people use technology to take advice for their medical problems rather than seeing a doctor. why this is so? it is positive or negative development according to you?

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

As computers translate quickly and accurately, learning foreign languages is a waste of time. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Rich countries often give money to poorer countries, but it does not solve poverty. Therefore, developed countries should give other types of help to the poor countries rather than financial aid. To what extent do you agree or disagree

More and more people are moving away from an agricultural background to relocate to cities in order to look for work. What will be the consequences of this? What solutions can you offer?

In spite of many advances, women have made in education and employment, they continue to be at a disadvantage when it comes to pay and promotion. In your view, what should be done to promote equality of opportunity for men and women in the workplace.

the unemployment situation in Australia in the year 2012.