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Plastic bags, plastic bottles and plastic packaging are bad for the environment. What damage does plastic do to the environment? What can be done by governments and individuals to solve this problem?

#plastic #bags #bottles #environment #damage #governments #individuals
A big
problem
 of
the
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humanity is the amount of garbage we make
everyday
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. Since the Industrial
Revolution
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 we
are
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have been
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 making more goods but we are making more
plastic
 packaging as well. And
this
 is not good for us and for the environment. Every year thousands and thousands of animals
have died
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in
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consequence
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 of
plastic
. It’s because they misunderstood
plastic
 with food. Another great
problem
 is the amount of
trash
 floating
on
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 the ocean.
A research
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 shows there is a big area of floating
trash
, predominantly
plastic
, on
Pacific
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. A big
problem
 for ships and sea animals
on
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this
 area. When you have a
lot
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large
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 amount of
trash
 you need
a
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the
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 correct space to put it, but some cities are having
problem
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 with
this
. Maybe a good solution would be recycling,
cause
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because
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 you could decrease the area for
trash
 deposits. To reduce the use of
plastic
 bags and
plastic
 packaging would be needed a change of habits. The people could help
recycling
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to recycle
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 the
plastic
 and
another materials
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another material
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. Another alte solution would be to use alternative packaging,
as
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 paper. It would reduce the impact of
plastic
 garbage
in
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 the environment.
This
 is a slow process because is not easy to change the mind of the people, but it’s really necessary.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • plastic pollution
  • ecosystems
  • wildlife
  • climate change
  • fossil fuels
  • air pollution
  • strict regulations
  • plastic consumption
  • eco-friendly alternatives
  • sustainable packaging
  • recycling facilities
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