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In spite of the advances made in agriculture, many people around the world still go hungry. Why is this the case? What can be done about this problem?

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recent years, technological progress shaped agriculture,
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. Global hunger can be solved once
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 will help the
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 for hungry nations.
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 of the weather within certain regions.
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 in turn can make
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 cheaper and more accessible. To summarize, starvation across the world remains to be a global threat to
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 species, regardless of the speed of industrialization.
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 damaging the soil and preventing
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 from growing. A solution to
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 growth and
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 production.
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Answer the 'Problem and Solution' topic

Problem-and-solution essays fall naturally into two parts, the first describing and exploring the problem, the second setting out the solution or solutions.

You essay structure should look something like this:

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – Problems
  • Body paragraph 2 – Solutions
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • One of the first problems of the...
  • Another problem that needs to be considered...
  • A possible solution to this problem would be...
  • One immediate practical solution is to...

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • inequality
  • distribution
  • access to resources
  • climate change
  • natural disasters
  • political factors
  • economic factors
  • agricultural practices
  • infrastructure
  • transportation
  • population growth
  • education
  • knowledge
  • food waste
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