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Many people prefer to eat from street, while other people prefer to eat fast food. Dicuess the reasons for this.

#people #street #food #dicuess
In the beginning, while physicians are recommending
to eat
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eating
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 at home, busy workers are preferring fast food.
In other words
, If some individuals have
much
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apply
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work,
The
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They
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 would prefer to eat
from
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on
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street
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the street
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 as it saves them time. Many restaurants established big advertisement
campaign
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campaigns
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 which can attract people
while
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when
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 they hungry and
at
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on
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street
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the street
a street
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 with the tasty food photos. Junk food
affordable
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is affordable
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 and save
much
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a lot of
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 time which hard workers prefer to
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be safe
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safe
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save
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 for their family.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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