Recent years, the number of crimes committed by young people in major cities throughout the world is increasing. Discuss this issue. Give reasons and suggest some solutions.

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people
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that the number of crimes committed by young
people
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in
mainly
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cities throughout the world is increasing. I completely agree with
opinion
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because the
crime
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proportion
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young
people
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displayed
an
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increase
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due to
development
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the development

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of
internet
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the internet

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together .
Governments
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struggle
sturglle
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with these problems and they can handle
if
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they will execute some solutions
such
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as
set
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up
conversations
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about
crime
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or decrease the prices of beneficial activities
Firstly
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,
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everything

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everthing
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everything

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are
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is

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an
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apply

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include
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including

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of internet
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such
uch
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as phones , computers have been changing and developing
in
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the earth .
Thus
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, the
use
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of phones or
computers'
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use
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is becoming essential for us . But
on the other hand
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, undoubtedly , there are many bad
things
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of
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technology like the application that affect badly young
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. Because there are many bad
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in
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on

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internet
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the internet

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and a young boy
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continuously
continuosly
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sees new
things
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while he uses
him
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phone .
For instance
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, a young boy is seeing an accident while he is using
with
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him
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phone ,
seeing
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sees

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a

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murder video or
seeing
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sees

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smoke
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cigarettes and
thus
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, he is beginning to
use
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bad
things
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due to videos and afterwards , unfortunately,
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crime
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commit rate display an increase . Another point to consider is that
governments
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can
rescue
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these
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childrens
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. I mean , there are a few solutions for
rescue
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from these problems .
Governments
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in schools and bad
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can tell in
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or they can decline the price of beneficial
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activities
activites
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like travelling or
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a
sport
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game .
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, many young
people
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that committed
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a crime
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crime
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crimes

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can
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.
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, the life of a child changed in
an
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best way thanks to
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teachers and conversation which has been . İn conclusion , unfortunately , the
crime
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commit rate is still increasing and many young
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have become
a
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guilty . we can
rescue
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from these problems if parents will prevent their
use
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phone
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or
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governments
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will set up
conversations
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about bad habits and guilties.

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