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In some countries an increasing number of people are suffering from health problems as a result of eating much fast food. It is therefore necessary for governments to impose higher tax on this kind of food. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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Excessive consumption of junk
food
 has led to a large population of
people
 suffering from health problems in most countries. I disagree with the opinion stating that the governments should impose a higher tax on fast
food
 On the one hand, increasing the taxes on junk
food
 will hugely impact the restaurant business.
In other words
, the
food
 joints will start cutting down on their kitchen and service staff, which would lead to the unemployment of many
people
.
Moreover
, the restaurant business is not considered to be the most profitable industry,
such
 tax increments will lead to huge losses, eventually shutting down these places, which would impact the national economy.
For example
, most IT professionals prefer to eat
food
 from restaurants even though, they earn well,they are not finding time to cook and eat at home. To summarize, if the government impose more taxes on fast
food
also
,
people
 who lead a sedentary lifestyle will stick to the same lifestyle that, they are following because of their busy work schedules.
On the other hand
, I believe the problem should be approached using a different solution. The government should come up with better public facilities in terms of, local parks, jogging lanes, cycling lanes, and public gyms,
thus
 encouraging
people
 to take a step towards their fitness. In conclusion, I totally disagree with the way of increasing taxes, it is a direct way but not effective with some groups of
people
 and it
also
 can cause some disadvantages. There are better solutions to fix
this
 problem and benefits more in long term without any disadvantages.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • public health
  • obesity
  • diabetes
  • heart disease
  • health outcomes
  • healthcare costs
  • consumer behavior
  • socio-economic backgrounds
  • ethical implications
  • public health campaigns
  • subsidies
  • regulations
  • nutritional content
  • healthier food options
  • government intervention
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